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> He didn't have wings, depending on how you meant that. But he could feel them, and while he could 'flap' through a wall, or another pony, he could also feel where his wings were. Folded them perfunctorily during class – and it had been found that when Snow Drift pushed him along, he needed to lock his wings straight out, and not try to 'help' fly, but just to soar, and steer while under the thrust of Drift's wingpower
Okay, I find the premise and description of his half breed Pegasi flight magic interesting. You have my attention there. It is something of a personal interest as I had a fic I had written (on paper, when I was a teenager) with a character who was a unicorn but with Pegasi magic, and thus, she could control the weather and cloudwalk naturally but not cast normal spells . I think this is the kind of concept you can run with and get an entertaining short story or full story out of. 

> Gryphon kingdoms
I like this detail, because I personally went with a slight german interpenetration of Griffons and liked the idea of their being multiple different states/factions like a loosely organized Holy Roman Empire. This became only doubly so after Griffonstone, which is a disappointment for use as the main faction for any Griffon civilization. 

> gryphon invasion army is poised to take over the small-town's coastal air collage and mean time it seems a local ritualistic murder has just been solved. 
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> According to highschool urban legends, you can eat the soul of a pony
> and gain their magic
Ahem, I think I get where you are going with this one. 

Of any critique I have so far:
MINOR SPELLCHECK TIME
>  They seem to be alive, just
unconscious, and students have been dispatched to the ground to request royal help but there is a large weather patter
> not where Wind Drift 
I assume Snow Drift was looking behind Wind Draft
Heh, yeah, this is the only thing that stuck out to me, though keep in mind, dealing with insomnia. 


Storywise my only complaint, with the 3 pages I have, is that I feel like I've been dropped in without a sense of things. It's hard to hold it against it though, because, well, as I said, 3 pages. The most negative thing I could say is that when Wind Drift ducked out is I don't quite understand what happened  Fears over the mission or avoidance over her unicorn aunt? I also am guessing the aunt might be the unicorn from the royal guard who is crying about her niece being sent on a suicide mission... maybe? That is the only thing I am confused over and that could be easily fixed with context.

All and all though, I am interested and do hope to see more if you get around to it.