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>>/2677/ > Shouldn't it be measures? Or is there a meaning to the wording that I'm not getting at? in theory, it´s measures. You are right. Measurements is the action of using a meter or quantifying physical property even though the same word in Spanish is the same. I have fixed that, thanks. > I think that it should be worded: not that it turned to black. I meant that regalia earned an orange color instead of getting the black color because of combustion (as one would expect). Fixed that either way. > I've always been hesitant when it comes to grammer as I've never considered myself to have an eye for it, but I'm trying to be more helpful and these two sticked out to me as a little awkward/possibly erroneous. yeah, thanks a lot. It´s always welcome to keep an eye on that and try to become a little bit better. However, I am surprised that I have written around 3700 words for this part in just one night and the only awkward mistakes to be found are those (so far). > Plus all the tag errors with Luna's dialog that was frustrating as hell. I sighed after checking that problem.I expected that the lines for Garble or Daybreaker would share this problem but they didn´t. Not a single line of the colored text for them has had this problem yet the blue one doesn´t work that well. I will have to test it a few times before posting the next part or deleting the incorrect post that only shows black text instead of blue. > It depends on how close to the show you plan to stick to and what you consider that even to be. that´s the core art of writing and freedom of creating literally anything. > But you have to ask yourself this: if Equestrian had a war would you portray death? Say you wrote a fic in the alternate Sombra timeline, would you put death in it. depends on what purpose I would try to convey with it. Those deaths have to add a message for the story. It has to complement it. If they don´t, I would focus on something else. There has to be something beyond that before putting them onto the table for a childish show like this one. I have commented that I certainly see it a bit over the edge for doing that but I didn´t have in mind other alternatives either... > Though for me I see no problem with it. I've seen fics go this far even when trying to stay close. It depends both on your philosophy and your goal. basically this. If it goes that far, there has to be a reason behind and while the action itself is pretty over the top, I tried to combine it with her desire and a medium to develop her thoughts. > All and all, I liked this fic. Though my enjoyment for this one has been characterized by my enjoyment/amusement for smaller details over the larger narrative set to assumable so far, so I won't offer a full judgment till I see how this fits in with whatever happens next. I looking forward to it though. well, this fic was created for expressing a political experience to some sort of content that will have to land somewhere else. There were no visions about this part nor plans to have it this long so it would be a chapter itself. I only wanted to express those feelings and then, combine with something else and it receives its own identity. I cannot promise anything because all I have built is just an excuse over another excuse. The fact that this is plausible yet entertaining content for the setting and fantastical world amuses me enough. There is more....but...we´´ll have to wait to discover it. Yeah, I don´t even have it all that clear.