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Glanced through some of the fic and honestly...

Twilight’s morning routine always involved checklists. Because there were so many documents to sign, and she was supposed to, expected to know what they were about. Though Celestia had filtered most of these so there wasn’t likely to be any vast surprises but she couldn’t rubber stamp them, either.

She had finally arranged the work documents into piles of ’could nearly rubberstamp’, ’I need to read these for mistakes and dangers’ and a small stack of ’need understanding before
reading because the existence of these papers confuses me’ when there was a yellow ”Meep!” that
accelerated towards her through a window.

As Fluttershy landed, Twilight realized how small that window was. Friends with wings were allowed some leeway about ”doors” but, given the speed and how this particular pegasus wasn’t accustomed to fine motor control needed to thread a maze such as that window, Twilight gathered
the idea this was critically important, and let thought of paperwork be driven from her mind. 

The yellow pegasus looked frightened, which was not in itself uncommon but gave approximate directions to the problem. Fluttershy looked wide-eyed at the princess, blinked, looked away, swallowed, and managed to look back. ”There’s a” She faltered, eyes searching the corners of the room behind Twilight for answers
before the suggested ”Visitor. To my property.”

Fluttershy’s look of quiet desperation hadn’t lessened, so Twilight tried coaxing a few extra
details. ”What tribe?” That got a brief look of confusion before a head-shake, and an expectant
look. No? Just, no? ”So, not a pony?” A quick head-shake. ”Was it an animal?” Fluttershy drew
back into herself, and sought out the corners again. More quickly finding an answer this time,
she came back with a squint, and a frown. ”Did you try talking to it?” A sharp breath, followed
by a determined, single head-shake. Twilight couldn’t use this information to gauge what had
frightened her friend, and didn’t want to go flying headlong into the unkown in the offsided chance
it actually was dangerous. ”What did you see, then?” 


First five pages/introduction are pretty strong. I remember the quality fluctuating throughout the story (which was a given with such a cram event) but, even if parts of the story aren't to my taste, I wouldn't call all your writing garbage either (not that I was calling it garbage before).  

This here all feels very natural and flows well. I think maybe the other anon already highlighted part of this but I ought to take a whack at it myself. There is pauses, subtle communication and body language, and some descriptiveness. I like the little detail of Twilight and her sorting through stuff. I like tiny bit of world building with the Pegasi monitor controls. You are not a bad writer even if this could use a lot of work.